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Aug 27, 2015wyenotgo rated this title 0.5 out of 5 stars
Sorry, Mr. Winter but your sloppy writing just doesn't cut it. You may have had a story to tell -- certainly the central premise of a civilian contractor getting in the middle of a fatal attack in Afghanistan is timely enough; and that, combined with a man disappointed in love finding a new reason to go on could have developed into a compelling narrative. Your settings also had great promise: the austere beauty of Newfoundland, the unhealthy, dangerous environment of Afghanistan, the gritty, non-stop work routine of Fort McMurray. Henry could have developed into a central character that I as a reader would come to care about. But none of that happened. Your haphazard thought stream, meaningless phrases that didn't go anywhere or have anything to do with the topic or situation at hand, never mind a total disregard for coherent punctuation -- all that got in the way. Your editors let you get away with all those bad writing habits and in so doing, they let you down.